This is my first post for the first Haibun Thinking – a new Haibun Writing Challenge. The prompt I chose was:
“Life moves pretty fast. If you don’t stop and look around once in a while, you could miss it.”
– Ferris Bueller’s Day Off
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His rise through the ladders of work left him breathless.
Time out for marriage that was for sure.
There were kids his wife assured.
No one mentioned this unfairness.
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One more time he had to check this corporate allure.
Corporate Gods before all.
Up, up towards that impossible goal for sure.
With all this some say he had a lot of gall.
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Once there, everything had been left behind.
But no one was there to see him now.
He thought he was a gift to mankind.
But in the end he wasn’t even the cats meow.
a rose for my love
i wish i could play again
one more chance to smell
Career or family?
A choice so many of us face.
Great response to the prompt!
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Yes indeed. I was faced with the same decision.
DJ
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Probably too true of a message in today’s world. The corporate go getter needs to know how to balance family life into the mix. Or – in the end -may be left all alone.
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True. Unfortunately it also happened to me. But I got my priorities in place pretty quickly.
DJ
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Oh – Glad that you did!
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AnElephant loves this approach.
Quite excellent piece of writing, original and refreshing.
And sad, but so often too true.
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I always like a comment by AnElephantcant!
DJ
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Be careful how you are to folk on the way up…you might meet em again on the way down …Great piece.
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Thanks for the comment!
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No probs
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My friend always says, be nice to your kids, they pick out your nursing home. Not that I need that reminder usually, but it does make me laugh. Sounds like the man in your excellent poem might have needed to hear this.
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Thanks for that!!!
DJ
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I know several men who fit that role. Thankfully my own hubby is not one of them…
I played here:
http://julesinflashyfiction.wordpress.com/2014/01/21/haibun-january-plays-whisper-down-the-lane/
~Jules(Paige)
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Thanks for the comment and link. I liked yours also.
DJ
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This is so moving….wonderful haibun and the haiku really does say a lot.
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Thanks Anja! You still set the bar.
DJ
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Awwww thank you. That’s kind but I really did love yours.
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I like how you told this. It’s really well done. Thank you for taking part Danny
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Thanks Al! That’s nice especially coming from you!
DJ
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🙂
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Excellent Haibun and Haiku Danny well done. You have conveyed an excellent message through both pieces.
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Thank you! You made my day. Thanks for the read and comment.
DJ
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Pleasure Danny thanks for participating.
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