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Cool babbling brooks here
Life lived without a concern
Death lurks near unseen
“Death lurks unseen,” though a nice turn of a phrase, makes it sound like the Big Bad Wolf. I would suggest “Death permeates life here.”
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One syllable too many (6). Haikus are 5-7-5.
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